Rough Cut 2

This is rough cut 2, after doing rough cut 1 and all the feedback we gained we went back and decided upon what we needed to film and how we needed to edit rough cut 2. We decided on filming many different scenes and started the video again from scratch scrapping many ideas we previously had in the first video

We then gathered feedback from this rough cut and where there was improvements and where there is room for improvement. There were many things that were suggested when gaining feedback:

• Slow down the opening sequence, as it is too fast paced.
• second scene also too long and needs cutting.
• they did not like the random flickering showing the little girls face.
• the shots of me on the moors, some are too shaky.
• on the railway shots, less acting and more abstract shots.
• The ending with the main character smoking doesn't fit and doesn't make sense.
• Shorten down the railway scene

on the 3rd rough cut i will therefore use all these improvements